A few years too much [Eng]

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CHAPTER 8!

When we walk in I get a lump in my stomach. A few feets away, Remus stands with a very much more beautiful girl than me. Her chocolate brown hair is falling down her shoulders and her perfect body make me want to sit down and cry of jealousy. I regognize her like Hannah Jackson, a shy, yet smart girl in Hufflepuff that I seriously wanted to be friend with. That is, before today. Stop it. You can't feel like this. Nothing is going to destroy this night with Devon. We have hardly spoken to each other, me and Remus. I knew him in the future, but here. He is just an ordinary guy, very cute, wonderful and just perfect. Yes, if it's something Remus is, it is perfect. Not even his 'furry little problem' can make me stop think that...
"So? Do you want to?" Devon interrups my thought.
"Huh? Sorry, I didn't hear what you said" I admit and blush scarlet red. The thought of me, thinking about Remus like that on my date make me so embarassed.
"Do you want to dance with me?" He smile and I nod. He takes my hand, and I'm actually happy that Lily gave me ballerinas instead of high heels. He look down at me and smile bigger. We start to dance slowly to the music.

After some dancing he walk away to get something to drink for us. I sit down on a chair. After some minutes I start to wonder where he is. I stand up and walk around a bit. I thought he just were going to get something to drink, but I was wrong. But why does it not hurt? Why do I just feel relief? I feel something more too but I can't identify it. A sigh leave ny lips and I turn around to walk out. Shouldn't I be sad about Devon kissing another girl? I just shake my head and caught a glimpse of Ross with Severus, and glare at her before walking out. It's dark and empty in the corridors. When I finally reach a bench outside the castle I sit down and release my hair.
"Our dates seem to have much more fun than us" I hear a voice behind me.
"Yes... Hey wait, it was her Devon kissed!" I burst out.
"Erm, yes I think so. Sorry" He smile awry and sit down beside me.
"Nah, I don't care. I like someone else" I smile shy and blush gently. We sit quiet a bit. When I'm sure he doesn't look I take the chance to study him. As I said before. Perfect.

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CHAPTER 9!
"Where did you go yesterday? I searched through the whole local but you weren't there!" I hear Lily somewhere say. After rubbing my eyes I finally sit up and start to look after some clothes to wear.
"I was with Remus" I answere and finally find a t-shirt and some sweatpants.
"Oh. My. God! You like him, don't you!" Alice sqeal. I jerk, and look around too see if there is anyone more that is going to scare me. Alice actually sleep in this dorm with us but it just feel strange.
"Hmm? Yeah, well he's a great guy" I shrug and try to sound nonchalant.
"No dumbass! She means you like him, like really, really like him!" Lily chuckle. Shit, they know!
"Why do you think that?" I ask and put my hair in a ponytail.
"Well, first. I can see that in your eyes. Second, you blushed when you mentioned his name and third... You're blushing right now!" Alice burst out excited.
"I might... A bit! But don't tell anyone!" I say and they start to dance around me.
"Alice? Lily? What are you doing?" I add confused and frown. They laugh and hug me.
"Al got a crush, Al got a crush!" Alice start to sing and Lily join her. I groan and try to get out from the room. Lily and Alice stop dance and sing, and start to run around in the room, looking for something to wear. I roll my eyes and tell them to hurry down to the commonroom, before I walk down and sit down in the couch.
"So, Allison. Who's your crush?" James smirk and sit down beside me. I groan.
"Shut up! And stop smirk! You look like Sirius!" I sigh a bit moody. 1. Remember to kill Alice and Lily for this later.
"I promise to don't tell anyone if you do me one little favour... " He start but I cut him of.
"You know who I'm crushing on. Yes, what do you want?" I ask fast, but sternly.
"Help me get Lily." He say. My jaw drop. That's nearly impossible isn't it? Or wait a minute... Oh my gosh, their children in the future is Harry Potter! That means they're going to get together! Wow, for being an ex-ravenclaw student I'm pretty dumb.
"Er... Sure. I'll do it, but promise to don't even tell Sirius, Peter or... Remus" I murmur and shot him a glare. He nod and I sigh.
"This is going to be... intresting" He smirk again.
"Stop it! You look like Malfoy! Or worse, Sirius!" I groan and sigh heavily again.
"What's with me?" Sirius shout at us when he's coming out from the boys dorm. James chuckle and give me an 'Don't-make-me-mad-or-I-will-tell' look. He walk over to Sirius and they walk away. Wonder where Remus is.

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