Snälla hjälp mig alla mugglisar! Engelsk grammatik!

Den där texten får mig att vilja ta död på någon omg *sobs* </3

Episkey

''It is a hot June evening. It's ten PM and still bright outside. I love taking a walk around the park located 100 meters from my house. I walk to my favorite bench that I always sit on. I sit down gently and I take deep breaths until my vibrating iPhone ruins the moment. I take it out of my pocket and see that it's my mom calling me. I whisper ''what does she want from me?''. I answer the phone and my mom starts talking in full speed without saying hi. My mother is yelling ''where are you?! Come home now! You haven't eaten your dinner yet and it's going to start raining any minute.'' How could it start raining? The weather can't get any better. The birds are singing and it's still bright outside. I don't understand how it could start raining. I answer my mom sadly, ''okay mom,'' and I stay for ten more minutes. I start thinking about how my mom knew that it would start raining. I think ''forget it!'', but suddenly all birds stop singing and it gets dark. I'm starting to get worried and I look up into the sky. I have never seen clouds that big before. I walk from the bench quickly and then start to run. I feel raindrops fall down on my cheeks. More raindrops fall down from the sky, faster and faster. Then it starts to rain so heavily that I almost can't see where I'm running. I see a huge tree and I run towards it, taking cover. I hear thunder. I hate thunder. I always have. It sounds so loud. I panic and suddenly a flash hits the huge tree and it hits me as well. I'm falling to the ground and everything turns black. I can see my mom shouting.''

Whew. Tycker lite synd om dig Det där är ungefär det jag kan få ut av det genom att ändra så lite som möjligt, tror jag. Hoppas det hjälper någonting i alla fall!

Men herregud jag tar mig inte ens igenom texten. Då har man verkligen lyckats med att misslyckas. XD

Ska du ändra texten så lite som möjligt eller ska du skriva omden så att det är bra? ^^

Så han var ute och gick, satte sig på en bänk, hans mamma ringde och sa åt honom att komma hem, det började regna och han fick ett träd i skallen?

Det är inte bara engelskan som är dålig här -.-' Lider med dig

Tack för hjälpen accioron, särskilt med delen ang trädet!

DeathDownAlex - Texten är i princip omöjlig att ta sig igwnom -.- särskilt slutet, lägger upp det när jag kommer hem.

Isabelle- Haha, sedan vill jag inte ens prata om delen när *jag vet inte vad* händer i duschen , han svimmar, hans mamma har en tallrik som han tror att hon kommer tappa och plötsligt har han hår på bröstet... Vill även påpeka att detta är en dystopi inspirerad av hungerspelen (!?) som vi skulle skriva.

Har hänt mig oxå men på svenskan Fast han har dyslexi så jag kände mest medlidande för honom

Ahahhaa.
Om du lägger upp slutet skulle jag kunna rätta det lite. Om du inte gör det sälv så att säga.

I can se my mom shouting "Oh my god! You are dripping wet. Go and take a shower and no computer until tomorrow!" Then after she screamed on me I wake up and wonder what the hell happened. I'm trying to get up from the ground and feel kind of dizzy and going home. It stops raining. I'm taking up my iphone out of my pocket and looks at the clock. It says 22.30. I get kind of confused and looks at the date. The year is 2019. I get chocked and wonder if it is the settings on the iphone. I'm going home and when I am outside my house my mom opens the door. There she is. My 43 years old mother who looks like she's 75 years old. I get inside. The first thing she does shouting at me and she is shouting " Oh my god! You are dripping wet. Go and take a shower and no computer until tomorrow!" "What the hell, Didn't she say that earlier today? I think. I walk in to the shower and the hot water is splashing over me and when I'm going to take my shampoo everything gets dark again. Hen everything gets dark I see that I'm in the kitchen with my mom and eating dinner. My mother is getting up from her chair and drops her plate without purpose. Then I wake up again in my shower with the hot splashing water on me and the shampoo bottle in my hand. I'm thinking "What is happening with me?" When I'm going to wash the shampoo form my hair I look down and I see very much hair on my chest. It sounds unreal but I think I'm in the future beacuse of that flash who hit the huge tree. I'm walking out of the shower and taking my close on. When I have my clothes n I walk fast down the stairs and straight into the kitchen. The dinner is ready and is already starting to eat. I sit down and look at mom because I know what is going to happen about what I saw in the shower. When my monm is done she stands up with her plate in her right hand and walks away from the table. I'm ready to catch the plate when she is going to drop it. At the right time when she drops her plate I jump in front of her and catches the plate. My mother says with a chocked voice "It's like you know what was going to happen." Now I started to understand that I can see what is happening in the future. I'm also in the future. I say to my mother "Mom I have something I got to tell you." ans I say everything. The first thing my mother says is " I know I haven't seen you in seven years." I smile and I hug my mom. "I've missed you so much" my mother says. I'm just being quiet and hugs her tight.


SLUT !!

Om någon fattade slutet... Förklara gärna för mig.

Jag lider med dig, verkligen. Den här texten är så hemsk att jag inte orkar läsa mer än ett par meningar. Lycka till (jag tror du behöver det.)

Ang slutet.. Som jag fattade det så fick han någon sorts superkraft när han vart knockad av trädet och var medvetslös i sju år och vaknade upp och kunde se framtiden...?