The love is in the air when the dark side is close [eng]

En liten ff av lilla mig
Jag är tyvärr inte jättebra på att ta kritik emot mig, men om det är något så skicka gärna en uggla
Jag kommer att lägga upp fanficen på wattpad men inte föränns jag har skrivigt lite fler kapitel.

Namn: Love is in the air when the dark side is close.
Språk: Engelska :33
Rating: typ Pg 12 någonting, det är lite kyssar och någolunda hård mobbing men det är väl det ungefär.
Huvudkaraktärer: Angelina, Fred, Lee
Handling: Det utspelar sig unden harrys fjärde år + sommaren innan. Angelina, Katie, Alicia, Fred, George, Lee och Jacob (ny Karaktär) har en tradition att komma hem till Angelina under en vecka och ta det lugnt, chilla, ha kul och självklart, köra sanning eller konka. Angelina och Fred är ihop men när Lee får sanning så erkänner han att han är kär i Fred, Lee blir utvisad ur huset av Angelina och blir sedan mobbad på Howarts samtidigt som han får konstiga drömmar...

Här är en mall för Jacob
Namn: Jacob Downell
År: 16
Utseende:
Personlighet: Lite blyg, är väldigt duktig på trolldryckskonst, har en STOR crush på Alicia

Har första kapitlet klart och har börjat på andra, ngn som vill läsa?? :33

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Skriver i olikas perspektiv bara så ni vet :33

Chapter 1 (Angelina)
It was the summer of 1994 I was waiting for Fred, George, Alicia, Kate, Lee and Jacob to come. It had become an annual thing that everyone came to my house to escape annoying siblings and muggle parents to just chill, play some quidditch and of course, play truth or dare. We were all in Gryffindor's quidditch team, except for Lee and Jacob, but they where big fans of the magical sport.
Last year had been very special to me, at least the last months when in April, Fred finally asked me out to Hogsmeade, which is one thing that I've wanted ever since I first saw him.
George still showed no romantic interest in Kate, but i knew that they where going to become a couple this year.
I heard a car outside and I realised that it was Jacob and his parents that had come.
“Hi mrs. Downell, hello mr. Downell and hi Jacob!” I ran downstairs where my mom were talking to Jacobs mum and dad.
“Oh hello dear, me and Geherd where just talking about how gorgeus your house is, is’nt it Geherd?” mrs Downell pushed lightly on mr. Downell who was looking with a scared and suprised faced on the iron that was ironing itself.
“oh, uh what honey?”
mrs. Downell looked annoyed at her husband and said “Im sorry about my husband, we have to go, we are meeting up with my mother on our way home.”
“But you said that we where going to a resturant.”
“Of course I did, otherways you would never had come with me. Anyways, have a lovley week Jacob and i’ll see you next sunday love.”
And then they went in the car and drove away and in the same second i heard a noise from the fireplace, I saw mr. Weasley, George, and my heart took a jump when I saw him, Fred! I ran into his arms and kissed him while everyone around us looked awkwardly at us, but I didn't want to let go, ever, but after a minute i let go, and mr. Weasley went home.
After a while everyone Lee, Kate and Alicia came along.
We went out to the pool and tanned and Fred, George, Lee and Jacob where playing pranks on each other. This was just the beginning of a perfect week, or was it...?